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I really thing someone confused the words dreadnought and juggernaut…
So the "explorers" went from looking around an ancient derelict to competently launching the suddenly fully-operative dreadnaught, with working engines, shields, and weapons?
Just a BIT of inconsistency… don't you think?
And then there's the inconsistent timeline.
They went from escaping in the lifepods, the core stablized and the enemy leader apparently killed as the ship purged itself, to being back in battle on the dreadnaught, with the core destablizing and about to blow as they…once again…battle the Zargon leader.
These are rookie mistakes.
Don't y'all proofread?
A great story, but it…and the readers…deserve better editing.
Ahh! The zorgans again, they get
Everywhere. 😮
It could be better… Try make a map of the timeline, when and where individuals are interacting, and where they are at certain times. Also keep track of the location of all elements in the story. As it is, they left the planet twice?
Also, do not jump from one critical point to another, maybe they should have had a bit more time to explore the big ship, first woken the AI that helped them with repair, after that the enemies could have entered and made them hastily have to flee, with a somewhat working ship.
Never heard such unreal nonsense before. How likely is it that a ship that has been hidden for a thousand years will be found and at the same moment an enemy will appear, who has also not been heard from for a thousand years? And then suddenly the wrecked ship becomes a fully airworthy ship and escapes the planet 2 times? Who wrote such nonsense? At least you could stick to the timeline and be consistent with your story.
All complaints aside it was a great story
Great story.
The FATE OF A FUCKING GALAXY AT STAKE FROM ONE SPACESHIP, CRASHED, SHOT TOO SHIT, AND FALLING PREY TO ENTROPY ON A TINY PLANET??? IT DONT EVEN FLY ANY MORE, BUT IT IS SOMEHOW ABLE TO BURN DOWN GALAXIES??
I despise UNREALISTIC writers, it should be an EMBARRASSMENT to the writers that allow their ALLIGATOR MOUTHS to bite off much more than their MICKEY MOUSE ASS can handle!!!
How can a skeliton stay together when all else rotted away and if rotted how can the uniform still be bits left
Would of been a really good story if edit was done correctly and a lil bit of thought in how you switch from one character story too the next but story really good and the frozen captain could of been a better bit to turn into a larger part of story got a bit from most modern stories like stargate universe and ship and person combined .
This would be great. If it wasn't for all the damn ads
Good idea for a story. Ok they find a human ship but are surprised to find a human crew? The ship didn't have engines but it works after the team finds it? Then they never heard of the zorgon but they were on top of them the whole time? Where was the ship they came in?
Too many ads. I can't finish.
Hello, my name is Marcelo, where did you imagine the name of the Zorgans?
Thank you.
This is a really terrible and repetitive AI written story. The timeline jumps constantly and it's full of plot holes. Can you at least proof read what you're gonna post before you waste our time
We Wuz Krell
Yeah i dont really care for this one, the time line doesn't make sense. Stating explorers discovered an crashed human ship thousands of years old long after humans became myth and legend but apparently the war that wasn't mentioned beforehand is still going on and nearly every decision they make determines "the fate of the Galaxy" that phrase got annoying real quick.
I'm going to have to agree with one of the other comments this sound like an AI generated story
Hello, my name is Marcelo, where did you imagine the name of the Zorgans?
Thank you
Like this story
I loved the story, it is unsettling to see your stories on other yt channels though.
Jumps back and forth a dozen zorgons turns into countless and too much repeated his fingers flew over the keys and such. One minute they were in escape pods and a second later they were running and fighting 😂😂
These stories are rather choppy. Its all over the place as though its going through different potential story lines of the same story.
He really talks too much I
wish he would just tell the story it's not a bad story line but the bs is way overboard.
Well I have enjoyed it. 😊
Wait! Isn't the original Capt still in stasis in the med bay?
Aliens will fear humanity
Seems it went from the captain to the doctor going to save the planet
Agree with most others that this is a disjointed mess.
It also seems that the AI writing this story dipped into old communist propaganda for source material, yet again. Appears nearly all HFY stories suffer as such.
Get your pages strait 59:05
Not even pages whole chapters out of sjequence