They Ridiculed The Humans, Until They Had To Beg For Mercy On Their Knees | HFY Full Story



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23 thoughts on “They Ridiculed The Humans, Until They Had To Beg For Mercy On Their Knees | HFY Full Story”

  1. as ever as ever- seen before — grating hearing it so often. as is grim determination/the word determination is so very annoying— also– the "infiltration team– does not need to be called as such so many times// your transitions are a bit choppy. get another way then grim determination please! every ounce of courage im enjoying the tale but gritting my teeth when phrases are used again and again….. also did 1 or 2 do a ramming speed maneuver? goodness they were so similar i though you had gone over the same ship for a 2nd time…./// break it up into chapters — or like part 1 ,2,3…… it just going on — i thought pescot had died?/// how with the void i thought they shoved it out of the universe? what am i missing? im at 155 now how did be get it into his hands? last to know they were flying a ship! grim deterin ton again -sir u r driving me nuts with this phrase!! also- fate of galaxy same complaint/// what is the nexus???? is it the void — doe he have it in his hands? how . are they clse to it via tractor beam? how are they not being effected? by the nex healing the other ship are being torn apart/… why arent they? stronger united ever before hon u are taxing me ……

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  2. It was good, though a bit cliche and a little hackneyed, with a few discontinuities. Having read sci-fi, fantasy and what-ifs for over 45 years, some of this was predictable but otherwise good. Need to flesh out these stories, so much potential.

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  3. This is an author who needs positive feedback, he/she deserves it, a lot of it. Story was good, so a few things repeat here and there. So what, their learning. I enjoyed it I listened to the whole story and enjoyed it. Kudos to the author. Thank you and keep writing.

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  4. Yeah, there were a few glaring glitches and a few repetitions, but overall an interesting and uplifting story. Listened all the way to the end. Agree that it's likely an early effort, and the author will take away all positive, well-meaning comments to build their skills and improve their craft. It feels like this story was written more in stream-of-consciousness mode, where the author followed through on an idea for the story, and maybe more attention could have been given to plotting out the arcs and character/plot threads. Storyboarding, if you will. Really enjoyed the emphasis on unity and bridge-building, and it painted a picture that one cannot help but feel the author is deeply committed to. I liked that every race that their vulnerabilities, and how the main characters worked tirelessly to overcome them for the greater good. A bit more attention to plot and character threads, but an otherwise excellent effort.

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